Reid family - chapter 1 - 7

December 9th, 2009, 11:20 am

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Reply meago, December 9th, 2009, 11:20 am

note: Seelgorde is one of the best universities in the country

feel free to point english mistakes ;3;

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Reply HyperKat (Guest), December 9th, 2009, 3:58 pm

How did they have her at 18 if they're 18 at the time they met? O.o

Reply Noru (Guest), December 10th, 2009, 5:05 pm

...vacancies... just a typo with switched letters, all other seems to be ok :)

Reply Abocreature, December 10th, 2009, 9:00 pm

Same question as HyperKat...
Slight mathematical error on that one, eh?

Reply meago, December 11th, 2009, 3:17 am

not really XD
all was happen pretty fast XD

Reply FredRock (Guest), December 17th, 2009, 12:51 pm

when he says "he has to help me to prepare" the second "to" isn't necessary. It reads better to simply have him say "he has to help me prepare" and the same thing when she says "i cant wait to return to home" simply "return home" or even "go home" would flow better.

Other then that you have pretty good English. I love your work by the way; and your characters are nice.

Reply LittleK-chan, December 27th, 2009, 3:07 pm

O.o Wait their daughter is 18 right. Did Bob and Emelie get thier daughter when they where 18?? and on the same year they met...I can´t get it togheter^^;

Reply meago, December 27th, 2009, 3:25 pm

yes, it's just like you said ^^
now i'm regretting it a little, cause i have no enough time for all story XD

Reply LittleK-chan, January 10th, 2010, 10:51 am

^^; Don´t worry somtimes you want things to happen really fast..even in real life to. I am also a rusher in my storys when it comes to family and fast that it´s almoust a shame to show, belive me. So I suport you all the way with the story.

Reply kat (Guest), February 23rd, 2010, 10:00 am

yeah the age thing kind of got me. i love what you did with the illustrations and such. very flowy. i like it.

Reply Azuka (Guest), May 25th, 2010, 12:02 pm

Appearance I feel the parents look too young to be 36, maybe aging them a bit more will help, because appearance really dictates the tone of their speech, right now they might as well be in their early to mid-twenties.

Reply Vila (Guest), January 20th, 2011, 4:53 am

Hej, a ja tak się zastanawiam, jeśli Mina ma rocznikowo 18 lat gdy Emily i Bob mają po 36, to wychodzi na to, że Emily miała właśnie 18 jak urodziła... Dalej wychodzi na to, że w wieku 17 lat zaszła w ciążę, ostatecznie zaraz po urodzinach 18, by zachować wiekową ścisłość, ale to wychodzi, ze po niecałych trzech miesiącach zaszła. :)

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